^ You Didnt KO Me In LLL YOu Fucking Bullshitter, Take That Out, Lol. .

This piece was decent, bar length kinda threw the flow, you seemed to try packing too much into too short a verse and it sacrificed the flow to do so. You had a few good concepts, they just needed better wording etc, transition needs a little work, again, nothing major, but if you ironed out the flaws you could make this ten times better.

Not a bad read though, you have potential.

Pz.