first of all this would be good as an audio,
flow and structure and flow were consistent,
apart from the last line,
which was a little stretched, you should of tried something like:

so shit happens, heartbreaks to the soldiers families,
snakeyes speaks the truth,flows what he sees,
got you like arabs saluting allah on their bare knees,
cant we forget the beef,and increace the peace,

^ just a quick example, but you get what i mean,

try and add a few internals and multis if you can ,but dont force it,
overall not bad, just work at it,

peace