Flow Was The Best I've Seen From You, Fell Off In Some Places, Where A Word Should Have Been Added Or Takn Away, But Overall Good.
Imagery Was Alright, I Had a Good Sense Of What Was Going On, You Just Need To Work On This A Little Bit.
Content Was Interesting, I Liked The Way You Came About The Pedaphile/ Cradle Robber View.
Structure Was A Little Bit Lacking, This Is The Reason That The Flow Fell Off A Couple Times, Cuz Lines Had To Be Stretched To Fit The Structure.
And Lastly Vocab Was Great, Broad Horizon Of Words Was Used, And Most Fit Well And Worked With The Story.

Overall: A Very Nice Peice.