not bad...

thorn i dont but for some reason it seem like you rushed your verse...it was still consisten but....had a few nice punches
didn't reall y hit, but flow wason point and wordplay was there too

eye structure is still newbish...line were too long
shorten them a bit..and work on your wordplay
had a few punches as well, but most were played
seen that "at chu" line on another site...not saying bit just saying
its not original, flipped it nice though

vote=thorn...he had better flow and a few nice metas
over this was ok...that it would have been better
good luck to both and no hate fellaz

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