Yo this just isn't that tight to me. Sounds like some old school Vanilla Ice. Delivery is just bad, lyrics need a lotta work. Just feedin back. Positive: You were on beat for the whole cut. Seems like you tryin ta sound hard and aren't pullin it off. My suggestion, slow down yer delivery a lil' bit, work on some harder lyrics and work on your mic presence...don't think i'm talkin shit, i wouldn't have gave any feedback but no one else was, so hopefully you can take this the right way and work on gettin tighter...1