1st off...

just say >no< to distortion..it sounds terrible...you can use sumthin different to be 'thought'..

turn up your vocals...

the delivery needs a bit more practice...

the beat is str8...

coud be a nice track...come back and re-do it some time in the future...

keep spittin...

:sidenote:

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=90217

^^peep game...