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Old 11-07-03, 03:16 AM   #4
Aisle Phive
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Decent Here...


Masta C You Had A Very Nice Rhyme Scheme.. But I Really Was Confused Throughout Most Of Your Verse. It Seemed Like I Was Missing Info.. Alot of It Was Pretty Random.. The Vocab Was Good. I Think You Should Shorten Your Lines.. Since Your Not Tellin A Story.. Overall I'll Give It A 6/10

Gene Pool.. I Didn't Understand Any Of What You Wrote. Lines Were Majorly Uneven. I See Potential But You Were Off Topic.. Focus On The Subject More Next Time And Fix your Structure. Vocab Was Decent. Overall I'll Give You A 4/10...

Keep Dropping.. And Peep My Open Mic Entitled "Don't Push Me..."
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