Dude You got tha potential to rap and you got ok wordplay.
You just gotta make your lines less choppy and even out your bars.
Try to go deeper into what you spittin to aswell.
If you need any help in perfectin yah shit holla at me on msn

emin3m1222@hotmail.com

or just reply in here Or both

Peace

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