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Old 11-07-03, 04:18 PM   #5
bouncedoggydog
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This is my input.;

Slim, you had some flow, but you lacked personals, except for the loses origin line. Cool but not enough teeth. I did detect multis in your drop, but none in Origins drop. You need to elevate in areas of complexity, vocab, imagery and meta's.

Origin, I thought you would give a beeter battle than this. I have seen your drops and can see some talent there. You just need to elevate more. You did spit a played midget line, and even though you had more personals and hints of punches, nothing landed with good impact. although your structure is simple and well basic, it id flow better. Flow is not a garenteed win, but since you mixed it up more, I think you beat slim by a small margin.

Keep elevating, you both can come harder next time. I hope that was not prewrite shit origin, cuz it was soft for a prewrite.

My vote= Origin for reasons explained above....
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