I really enjoyed reading your piece, it has a strong point of view.
Vocabulary was on point, not to much but just enough. Your
structure was nice it didn't go from a short line to a large line or
vice versa.
FAVORITE LINES
"Earth is only a trap we can't escape, without having to forfeit our soul
My heart resembles disease as a shape, i'm unable to take control"


"The hand of death reaches to take us home, this is what it has come to
King of sin stands before our eyes, a hotel we didn't want to check into"

I thought that you could have done better at the end of the
second line b/c they end in the same word. I will look forward to
reading some more of your work. Keep Writing.

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