This piece was alright
the structure was good, the flow was nice
it was an easy read
the vocab fit right in with it

for the topic you choose
i feel the piece could have been stronger
it was a nice read, but it was missing something to me
i can't find words for it though....
when i do i'll come back
untill then, nice drop
keep elevatin

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Poetry
Don't Look Into My Eyes Forgotten
Understanding Once Again
"It requires wisdom to understand wisdom:
the music is nothing if the audience is deaf."