the same as Pot sed....But, U need to elevate a LITTLE bit, BUT, when u do, Im sure ppl will respect u if ur cool..!!

Theres not allot that needs Fixin, maybe use complex words, use words with more syllables...I liked the "dracula/Spatula" line cuz it was a good usage of syllable-istic words...!!

Maybe use punches thatle be usefull for the topic...And try what Me,Cam,Pot1ent and Ayura use, Allot of internal multiple rhymin.
Used mostly by us 4 dope UK mc's lol...
Non the less, it was a good piece...props....
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=87346
Holla mine blud...!!