The structure of this piece wasn't there at all. The flow also wasnt too good because it was off at a lot of parts. You had really long lines, and then a short line that rhymed. The topic was good, and a lot of the vocabulary that you used was good, but the structure and flow were off. It was a good piece, but it would be better with a different structure and better flow.

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