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Old 11-08-03, 08:17 PM   #9
Rob D
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wasnt great,but wasnt bad,
espcially as its your first topical for a while,
in some places the flow was good,
but in some it felt off,
like you tried squeezing a extra word in here and there that didnt really go,
rhymescheme was ok but could do with a little work,

overall average drop.but keep writin and you will improve..

peace
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