this is aiight...quite alot of filla init n you dont rhyme till the end of them long lines...but you stay on topic n all tht shit..it flows aiight...you need more structure to your verse...throw in some multis or a more complex rhyme scheme n this shit wud b pretty tight...

if you hit up battle in my sig wud b greatly apritiated...shits slept on n i aint got anymore up's