Hmm.. Yes, Their Could Be Sum Defninite Improvement.
I Dont Know Much About Poetry But I Am Pretty Sure That
Unless You Are Free Versing It Then One Line Has To Rhyme
With Another. You Just Went For Internals And Thats It
Dont Get Me Wrong, Internals Are ill, But If Their Done
Right..

This Style I Blown It.. Looks Kinda Dumb Now Dont It?
I Eat Cheese Fries.. And Beat Midgets Up Knee High..
^ Not What You Want To Be Doing

This Style Is Great.. Wait.. I Dont Come Crooked i Come Straight..
Its Fate.. Feel Better Cuz Auspicious Taught You Suttin New Today..
^ That Is What You Want To Be Doing

Just A Lil Advice.. Other Than Not .. Not Bad

Take Sum Time To Hit The Ones
U Didn't Hit Up Before
ClaustrophobicS Present: The Boat Deck
ClaustrophobicS Present: The Boat Deck (Alternate Ending)
ClaustrophobicS Present: Less Fortunate
Mind Is Not Brain
Main Down The Stream
Hanging On