Abstract in structure, I couldn't find any common ryhme scheme but I guess you may have purposely done that. I think you could have done a better job by cleaning up the format. It had emotion to it, but it is over riden by the structure, it's all over the place. I have seen some cats pull off this type of piece before, but they had a even structure which helped. Keep elevating that's what were all here for, don't let anyone tell you otherwise..

Bounce..

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