i liked readin this.Sum key bars:

-I sit staring at the stars…hoping to be one, brightly marked
I don’t plan it to embark…but dreams rocket sky high
Into the glistening nights pride…its galactic jewels mesmerise
But like aspirations I cant touch the prize…so close and yet distant-

Those were ill as hell,sick metaphors.Good flow as well.Stay ^
-Avi