yo, this is for u'r second beat...posted in the wrong thread.
neways.....

First off, don't listen to the advice to use E-Jay. U'll end up makin the same beats that 20,000 other kids have made and learn nuthin bout how to really make beats.

aight, the guitar shit u wrote was good. u used a decent quality sound for it and the arrangment worked. that said, everything else needs work. i kinda understand where u'r trying to go wit the drums, but what u ended up wit is a little too unstructured. drum loops have to have a solid foundation, even if u want to end up wit them a non-traditional arrangment. while playin u'r guitar melody loop count 1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6, 7, 8. place a kick on the odd numbers and a snare on even's. now u should have sumthin u can start noddin ur head too. from here u can add or take out more kicks/snare, and fill it wit high hats. but u should always bea ble to feel that initial flow created by the standard rythm.

all said, keep writin nice melodies n work on ur rythm sections.

pc

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