ay yall im remixing the JAYZ and EMINEM track "RENEGADE" but in text and im lookin for someone to collab with on it so holla. you'll need 2 verses. 1 verse with 10 bars (20 lines) and the other with 8 bars (16 lines) juss like i'll need so holla at me

the open mics i voted on were:
Sthash-my aim is
Jay-R-mic life
Jay-R-12 Line Keystyle


LOOKIN FOR A COLLABO
and im not done i still need 1 more verse

I’m the only rapper my age that’s classified as urban//
Disturbin, my generations’ methods of learnin//
Cuz I blaze fires and keep herb burnin//
A renegade for certain, never show wen I’m hurtin//
But I cant help it if I’m far further intriguing//
Than a bunch a dickheads have our youth completely misleading//
Pleading and bleeding// dragged around kicking and screaming//
Drownin in the hazards of dreaming// they beg us to keep reading//
When actually my blood has been heating// I been battered and beaten//
My spinal fluids been leaking// Hunched over everybody’s critiquing//
I watched for years as the hatred grew worse//
The sun set the moon dropped and I worked on my verse//
Yall had ya fun but there’s a new king to be crowned//
Everything I bring through my sound// RENEGADE for all 200 pounds//
I’m alive by surprise failed to open my eyes//
I been a RENEGADE for most a my life, till da day of my demise//
I been played through da lies// but I got a big hung set//
Was rewarded for something I haven’t done yet//
Da skill to work words, and structure my lines//
Rupture some spines, a RENEGADE for some time//

dats all i got for now...

LOOKIN FOR A COLLABO

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