a really interesting poem, tha topic is one where u don't wanna attack it tha wrong way and get it off incorrectly but u did quite well on...

one thing, though, careful with ur rhyme scheme, specially internal, tha way u had it really stopped tha flow of a rhyming poem but ur pretty close to where u want to be, jus work at it...

elevate...

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