I like how this was actually believable in a sense, the fact you kept on mentioning wanting to go back to him.
If I had a uterus this would be really inspirational, well, if I had a uterus and was in an abusive relationship. I have never hit a woman, nor could I even conceive of doing so, and this makes me want to stay like that even more.

“A tear streamed my dusty face and the moistened path glistened.”

-That was quite vivid. In an odd way, it made the crying seem peaceful, which added to the whole idea of the poem, you leaving him. Even though your leaving him because of him hitting you, the fact you are leaving is so strong, and is almost peaceful.

“All of the sudden I was alone, I touched my forehead to remind me,”

-That’s such a true action. You know your cut, you know its bleeding, but you touch that cut and you remember everything, how it got there, why its there, everything.

“Then I wanted to turn around, and scream for him to come retrieve me,
Cuz even though we had been fighting, I didn't think he'd actually leave me”

-Like I said earlier, I like how ‘believable’ the poem way, and this is one of the parts that made it like that. So realistic.

Great work.


And people are so generous with replies because they think your Alicia Keys.