aight...check it....Angell had the punches and personals....which is what got this battle.....ur structure is kinda rough..but other than that...pretty good....and names...u had a nice flow and structure...u got the basic idea....only prob is u had weak punches.....and u need to up ur vocabulary some....this was a good read from u both....but like i said in the beginning Angell got this with punches and personals....no hate...just a vote....

peace
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