that shit was weak.

get off the dr sues rhymes, rhyming crip slip drip flip doesnt take alot of skill. you had no quoteables. try writing about a topic instead of this im a gangster and your not shit. its to basic. if your going to do gangster rap say something that has never been said. make it your own.

work on your structure to, one line has 4 words, then the next has 19 words, it throws off the whole flow. you just need to elevate on everything