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this feel off on a lot of points, your flow was choppy, cuz it was different all over. You iddn't stay on topic, if your going to write a long song or summin fo her tell her emotions and imaginary your desires things people wonna hear not played lines like your ending, it sounds good but you should spice it up with something like
Your my extacy got me jumpen round playen a hype
you in my arms at night baby nothings ever felt so right
^^thats not much better but a little more interesting...no hate just trying to show an example..keep elavetin pz man
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