This wasnt bad, short bar style added to your flow really cause you could tell where you paused in the bars, this wasnt a bad effort, some subtle wordplay in there and an abstract-esque kinda take on it, picked up nearer the end in my opinion, again though - more internals and multi's would help your stuff, flow wise, content wise basically everything. Their not essential, but they really add a lot to a piece. Just something for you to work on.

Oompa loompa, nigga!

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