ok. vocals are WAY to low. one your flow is ok at times. off at lots of times. hook is off. you sound 11 or 12 your voice hasnt developed yet. so you have alot of elevating coming. try to boost eq on your vocals to about 7k(im guessing you have no idea what that means). overall not bad for someone so young. o yea you need WAY more mic presence. dont rap like your mom is in the other room. RAP LIKE YOUR FACE TO FACE WITH A DEMON.