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it was aiight, basic rhyme structure worked for you, never eally messed up anywhere, it was tight, you explained the emotion well, but it lacked emotion...get what im sayin...its liek thatsmay be how u feel, bnut hte rawness of the emotion didn't coem through, keep workin on your wordplay, and try to capture the raw feeling that makes that kind of rhym good
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"..Very nice..Very emotional...real Deep piece..I really enjoyed reading this..there are few good writers on this site..and I think they are good cause simply they write some good shit..but..rarely I enjoy reading a piece..but..this was fantastic..peace.."
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