Good job. For this being ur first time droppin in the poetry section you did iight. True, it didnt rhyme, but none of the stuff dat i drop rhymes. My opinion on that is that rhyming seems to limit you on what the topic is and it doesnt allow you to flow well with your ideas. Yes, it is short, but i think that you did a good job. Structure and wording was fine. Topic was good, and u seemed to get ur point across. Once again, overall, I liked it and u did a good job. Looking forward to reading more of yours. Much respect.