yea this was really basic...u had multis though..and a decent flow so it'd be decent for an audio..but u didn't really have any punchlines or metaphors....+ your rhymes were pretty basic....just work on your stuff a little more and u'll get the hang of it...u seem like ur not NEW to rapping..but you seem like your new to the style of hiphop on this site...neway elevate..and don't take my criticism as a personal thing

peace

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