Thread: Amature Lust
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Old 11-14-03, 08:48 PM   #2
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yea this was pretty coo...not GREAT but some parts were real nice and I wish I could quote on my stupid ass comp but I can't....for the most part each verse was pretty simple but got the point accross...but in each verse there was about 4 lines that stood out to me..ur vocab was very good for a track like this...and your flow was on point mostly....u could've worked on a few things like not saying the word "player" that much...afterall most people that have to identify themself as a player usually isn't...a true player keeps a secret identity lol

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