ok. beginning the intro needs a little more emotion... its kinda long. lyrics are coo. you not rappin loud enough. i use to have that problem.. trust me you gotta scream your rap to get the emotion you want. you need to eq those vocals. raise frequencies at about 7k 5k and10k. you sound to muffled. your lyrics is coo. you just gotta work on ya flow.
coo drop homie.
RIP to ya boy... i just lost one of my homies 2 weeks ago. i know its hard. ~stay up