if this was a freestyle, why'd you add the reverb and add some ad-libs? a freestyle is to show raw skills, I can understand noise reduction and hard limiting, but no need for anything else.

I'm not trying to be a hater either, I'm giving you tips to up your skills ya know? feed back like this was what made bigger netcees like warbux...even though I personally dont like warbux. but like I said no hating, I cant even freetyle myself.

one other thing...alot of rappers dont have originality anymore, they pick out a favorite main stream artist and do like he does...you sound exactly(no lie) like a mixture of fabulous and cam'ron... and In my opinion both of those emcees are skum...maybe they sell alot, but you shouldn't copy any artist just because there succesful or for any reason. Look at rappers who try to be like eminem if you need more proof and disagree with my statement. there's no exceptions, you need to create your own style, I can even help you out with that, my aim is fredwycheckxxx

and the last thing. there's an unwritten rule alot of netcees have started to follow lately. dont rhyme about guns...you'll be looked down upon mainly because alot of peeps just think it's stupid to act hard and gangster on the net...I personally believe peeps just put on an image to cover up who they really are. which again takes away originallity, also never rhyme about cars and bitches(well...not often...it makes you look...as whack as lil wayne...notice he maid a whole song about bling bling and he has no skill at the same time but he's very successful...peeps need to listen to music more.) it would help to focus more on issues in your life, problems in the world, shit like that. I open up on tracks, I've learned to not care what peeps think of me, I'd rather be honest than be ill, ya know? I guess that's all I got to say

dont take any of this in the wrong way either

-peace