Good job. It seemed like you were going to rhyme, then not. Lil weird. But newayz, the flow was nice and the structure was good. You got ur ideas out and it was a good read. I liked the way that u put ur perspective of life together, as a song. Not too many ppl can see it in that form. However, I agree with it. Overall, I liked the poem. Keep it up. Good job once again. Much respect.