This was decent.
You were telling a story, but it bored the hell out of me. Lots of decent rhymes, and some good vocabulary, and your flow was good, but the piece stops there. I din't see anything here which was proving how hot this piece was, it is something better off in audio than in here, because this is autobiographical. You did an ok job. 7/10

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