This piece was decent, it was too lacking in depth and vocab to be much more and i'd like to inform you that you broke the rules of the forum, your only allowed one poem a day and u posted 3 on the 16th, if i were a mod u would be banned for not following the rules but since im not i can only tell you to chill out and wait a while before posting your next poem, hope you dont get banned, your poetry is unique, 1luv.