It started off ok, seemed to decline as it went on though, flow got choppy as it continued and you seemed to get tied up trying to link your various thoughts together into one piece. I didnt like the whole `white` idea, that didnt appeal to me, nbut thats your choice to take it that way its just saying 'Finna' when your white makes it sound dumb to me, flow was sketchy, content wasnt anything standout, wording could use work, more multi's and internals would spice this up.

Just my two cents.