this needs some work.... your flow was good and it stayed consistent... but the topic of "im ill" is played heaps.... and u need to up your vocab and use some advanced rhyming skills like multis, metaphors, wordplay... oh and.... please please PLEASE dont rhyme a bar with the exact same word

kinda like god and jesus/
rap is da god and im his jesus/

neva stopping in da hallway still/
bell rung we still in da hallway still/

then i rhyme 2 it right in front of da teacher/
she kno in da rap game im da teacher

^ that is lame ^