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Atra Ludio or Hip-Hop?
From: Cottage Grove, Oregon |
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Loose Ideology Outline
Intro: The intro is a very short mini story itself that focus' on Lucy with her friends. It should be lasting one day and she will come home to her mother's dead body, she had comitted suicide. Then it phases out to a distanced narrative about her having to be shipped to her father in South Kalapuya.
Development: A large part of the story is placed here. Lucy hates living with her dad. Her dad is abusive and an alcoholic. (The abuse stems from when she was a child, before her mother and him divorced.) She then meets Neural and the two become friends. Neural meets her dad and her dad doesn't like Neural so he forbids Lucy from seeing him. Plus of course, there is that seven years in age difference. (Lucy is fifteen, Neural is twenty two.) But Neural has no immediate romantic feelings towards her. But she however, has her fantasys.
During this time she learns and studys the subjects that Neural has researched himself. She takes particular interest in lucid dreaming. She tries to learn and he even helps her. Even going so far as to let her sleep at his house for excercises.
Rise: The rise begins after a string of failures (Becomes lucid, but immediatly wakes up due to excitement, etc.) She succeeds for the first time however. But she is awakened by her father and she ends up snapping at him, which eventually leads to her getting kicked out of the house. So she bunks with Neural. From there they pursure their romantic relationship, which for Neural has been rather latent until now. As well as her lucid dreaming excercises to an alarming frequency of success.
Climax: The climax is a chapter all it's own. It's one dream where Lucy decides to delve into her most deepest fantasys. She trys for the first time a time stopping technique. This gives her all the time in the world to do what she wants. In her fantasys she is doing everything from a content eating of her favorite foods, to being with her friends whom she hasn't been with in so long. And even going so far as to explore things with Neural that she would never do in real life, for a variety of reasons.
The final part of the climax comes when she decides she misses her mother. And so suddenly there she is again at her home in Seattle and her mother is there. Suddenly she loses control, but she is still lucid. Her mother confronts her and tells Lucy that she is following the wrong path. She tells her she needs to set things right with her father and that her dreams may be seemingly real, but are not an alternative nor escape from reality.
Fall: The fall comes when she wakes up. She is so scared by what happened at the end of her dream that she discusses it with Neural. He tells her that their is probably some truth to what her dream-mother had told her. That she probably should forgive her father for the abuse he put her through, and get her help for his drinking problem.
She is able to get him help for his drinking problem. Her father doesn't want it, but inside knows he needs it. But it takes years for her to ever forgive him.
Reflections: Twenty five years later. Lucy is fourty years old. Suddenly the seven year difference of age doesn't seem all that big now that they are so old. The two of them even have a seventeen year old daughter. One day their daughter comes home with a twenty six year old man. Lucy can only think to herself how wrong that is. But she doesnt' want to be a hypocrite. And so their daughter continues seeing him, up until the day she stumbles in drunk and pregnant. And Lucy can only think to herself how lucky she was to find a man like Neural, it must be genetic for her to find bad men to be in relationships with. Her mother found a bad man, and her daughter did, she dodged a bullet. That's all there is to it.
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