Its true.. art thrives on suffering.. Be it visual or not, our senses respond greater to darkness. I wonder sometimes, if this is so because of its mystery. Do we dare venture there?
Interesting write Shi. I do agree that the flow was a little off, but I believe that was due to the structure, and vice versa. To write in such a format, the flow does need to be stronger, or the reader will get lost.
I enjoyed the concept though, what I got out of it anyway. Might be totally off base with my impression, only you will know

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