yea man that's some real basic stuff. more complex wordplay and rhyme scheme, some more and better multi's would help alot to, improve on ur vocab and also ur flow was a little choppy, but for starters work on ur rhyme scheme structure and wordplay cuz that's way to basic. but nice try for first drop man keep elevatin. peace.

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