This was a really simple verse. It reminded me of the first one i ever dropped, but that oks. dont hate on this kid cause he is new, help him elevate!

You need to keep writing... read ALOT of open mics and listen to lyrics in songs ALOT more. It will help you see how to make your flows more ill and fill thenm with extras like multis and metas, that helps create a deeper meaning... its not a bad drop thoi, just kinda generic