nice.

u could've done away with the little ~ before every other line, i ddin't see a purpose in that...the reader should be able to recognize that u are making a new sentence, or a new thought..

content was very nice, and u maintained a good flow. i enjoyed ur diction - "drenched" "glides"...it was very nice...it all went very well with the fact that it was raining, i liked that.

interesting concenpt as well...made me think tho, very creative...

i felt like the rain was a metaphor for desair..it slowly tears u apart, and becomes ur complete focus...everything else becomes meaningless, and u concentrate so hard on the depair that it almost becomes a part of u...then hope comes through ur clouds of despair and u are left again with another chance to "fight" through life, knowing the despair could be waiting anywhere..the grounds are stained with pain...perhaps this is a whole metaphor for life...u are alive with emotions, u live and express them, tehn u die and forget them, leaving behind an essence, but being forgotten for the most part...or perhaps im just rambling on and im really stoned...i dunno.........

kind of depressing, and pessimistic in the way that i read it...cus usually sunlight refers to happiness and good times to come...but in ur poem sunlight brings u into the forgotten...interesting...

nice little piece...hope i wans't too far off on my interpretation...this is just how i read it...most likely not how it was intended...
laters