Its ok
Structure sucked..but the flow was nice kinda poetry flow tho, but just go back to writin ..the way u write..not..u know what i mean = )..
Who was really my wife
Then started to beat her
Right infront of my daughters site
Then my feet grew weeker
As I fainted at her site
Wsnt feelin the double site in it,..but it seems it was rushed,
Im not feelin ur new style
It looks ...olso..yea how u say ^^
and the rhyme was sometimes of, on some point..
But oh well, ..i only write songs so who am i ..
Pz