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Old 11-19-03, 12:11 PM   #4
Edicius
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Its ok

Structure sucked..but the flow was nice kinda poetry flow tho, but just go back to writin ..the way u write..not..u know what i mean = )..

Who was really my wife
Then started to beat her
Right infront of my daughters site
Then my feet grew weeker
As I fainted at her site

Wsnt feelin the double site in it,..but it seems it was rushed,

Im not feelin ur new style

It looks ...olso..yea how u say ^^

and the rhyme was sometimes of, on some point..

But oh well, ..i only write songs so who am i ..

Pz
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