K: not necessarilly a battle rap, u came weak wit everything but flow n structure...use some rap taktiks like metaphors, multi's, wordplay, similes, personnals...etc...
yo when i'm in tha mind of state, i rhyme to meditate,
so now let me demonstrate, how i confenscate,
^^ this has in it an inclusion of 3 well known rhymes so try to find sumtin else that rhymes wit these three, at first i thought i was readin sumtin from Jedi Mind Tricks or sumtin else overly played...
O: hits were there but weren't all that hard, step them up to give a WOW effect next time...
Look at this newie so eagre to battle, he forgot to check in,
oh shit that bad luck cause you also forgot to drop a verse to win,
^^ started off hard wit tha personal but fell off at tha end...work on tha bar as a whole to give tha WOW effect...
vote: Oli easilly took this, Kenoras need to step up majorly...jus elevate...
peep this wit an honest vote to keep shit poppin...
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