Nok'd
I was not feeling your verse that much... I see what you were trying to do with repeating the word but this was not the piece for it...id suggest cutting you line lenght some

MC Tac...
Nice approach to the topic...one line in particular had me laughing

I worked at McDonald's, BK, and Taco Bell cause there I could get food
The only reason I quit my jobs there, was cause I got sick of the menu

Anyway, your apporoach was nice, but you need to work on the overall strucuture of your piece...this was all over the place and the flow was off a few time...i didnt quite get the ending but whatever

Vote - MC Tactix