Nice concept
i felt you, and i understand what your saying. I know many that think that hustling is the only way, and the alternative is a strugle, but i also know that most of them know that they could have something better and they are the ones that push me to do right for myself more so than anyone else. But away from that, this was an ok piece, a nice read b/c i can make connections. But your rhyme was weak, i think you could have dug deeper to find more effective ways to say what you did. I agree with Bounce in saying that the rhyme seemed forced, and for me it did take away from the piece as a whole. But this was still good. I enjoyed it.
Keep elevatin
keep writin

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Poetry
Don't Look Into My Eyes Forgotten
Understanding Once Again
"It requires wisdom to understand wisdom:
the music is nothing if the audience is deaf."