this was nice
a good, positive message here
i agree and can relate to all the violence, because it's everywhere, no matter how hard we try to look past and hide it
looking at the techincal aspects...........
the flow was str8, easy to understand, the structure was ok but i think you could have upped the vocab, brought this piece to a whole nother level,
but this was a nice piece
keep elevatin

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Poetry
Don't Look Into My Eyes Forgotten
Understanding Once Again
"It requires wisdom to understand wisdom:
the music is nothing if the audience is deaf."