White...
your flow was off at times, alot of the time....some words didnt rhyme well either...i like how you did the topic, good imagry of the old man..but your flow and lack of real rhyming at time made this a hard read

Mad...
let not take into account my personal pet peeve...the flow on this was good..a few times you tried to hard to get something to rhyme, yet the pace of the piece allowed it...liked the topic...the last 3 lines i felt you could have done without

Vote - Maddawg