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you had mostly internal rhyme scheme .. i liked your title .. it was catchy .. i liked your first chorus .. in my opinion .. you should've just stuck to that one .. wasn't really feelin up on your second one .. but i like how you thought of that .. thought it was pretty creative .. you didn't have too much vocabs up in this .. so that's good .. you didn't make it boring by loadin it up wit a lot of enormous words .. peep my sig and return the favor .. get at me!
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